Wake up Richard it’s ten past eight. So I grabbed my sandwich as I dashed out the door. I whispered to myself “I'm going to be late for school”. I started sprinting then all of a sudden I forget my battery that I needed for technology to make something energetic. Then I sprinted out the door, again. Half way down the road I stole a bike from this old man about the age of 70. When I hurried into class people started laughing at me. Then I forget, I was wearing no clothes all you could see was a white boy.
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