Wednesday 15 November 2017

Natasha 100WC T4W5

The day was good for hunting, Tom the Big and Brave was feeling lucky today. He hopped out of his cabin and ran down to the crew at the bottom of the ship. His odor smell sickening those who kept themselves clean and his lengthy black beard filled with things that are not spoken of. Some days are worse than others in a pirate's life but today was going to be a good day because today was the day of finding treasure. The mysterious map that was going to lead them to it was hidden in the second draw of Tom's rusty cabinets. That was the last thing Tom remembered. When he woke up next he was next to the treasure that he'd been dreaming about. The only thing Tom came to say was 'It's great! But where would we hide it all?'

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