Monday 27 November 2017

100WC WK7 T4 Alice

I hurried out of my bed feeling energetic as I shoved my ham and cheese sandwich forcefully down my throat. After I put my snorkeling gear on, then bolted out of the house and headed towards the beach. I was engulfed with excitement as I leaped off of the rocks and plunged into the tropical waters below. Suddenly, a white glow caught my eye, I attempted to examine the mysterious glow further as I swam down to the bottom of the sea and picked it up. It turned out to be just an 1950’s battery. What an adventure! I thought.
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  1. Anonymous29 November 2017 at 20:58

    I really liked your story Alice.
    It had heaps of great descriptive words.

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