Monday 11 September 2017
grace
Bang ! straight through her. Tears rolling down her cold pale check." by my darlings she said" . By mum I love you . My brother sat there in silence as mum faded away. I knew we had to go before the others get us but Josh wouldn't leave Mum. "come on josh we have to leave now I said " . "So what lies a head of this " he said. "I dont know I said but we cant stay here " I said.
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