It was a dark and stormy night. I was about to go to bed when I heard a tapping sound on my window. "Who's there?" I shouted. Suddenly there was a flash of lightning; I saw a face at the window. It looked like an alien ... an alien that I had seen on the television show. "I felt very scared. I ran to my bed and pulled my blankets over my head. I started to shout for my parents but there was no reply. Then I remembered that they were looking at the Eclipse of the Sun. Then suddenly it went dark and I woke realising that I had just had a bad nightmare.
Sunday 27 August 2017
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Good job dude! The story was really interesting ( :
ReplyDeleteYour story was really interesting connor! at the end I'm a bit confused on how he had a nightmare because the eclipse is really cool
ReplyDeleteIt was a great story and interesting.
ReplyDeletegood gob but try having a rely creative end not just it was all a dream
ReplyDeletei liked how you said that the alien looked like it was the one from the television.i also liked how you said that you heard a tapping sound on the window,i think you could make it real next time rather than a nightmare.
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