Wednesday 30 August 2017
Grace
Aren't lights fascinating. All of a sudden it when dark. This was because I turned the light switch off. Isn't this amazing how there can be light, and then no light in seconds. There are lights on cars, trucks, street lights, lots of things. They even have lights on ovens and water proof lights so you can see what your doing outside when it's dark which is very handy. When you think about it it would be very hard to do lots of things without lights…...
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An imaginative story Grace, I love how you didn't make a narrative but an information report about lights. Next time check your spelling and grammar before you post the story, for instance, after a full stop there should be a capital letter, and after a comma or full stop there should be a space.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the style of writing that you used. You could work on putting spaces after full stops and punctuation.
ReplyDeleteNice gracie.
Your story is definitely one of a kind!! I loved your ideas.
ReplyDeleteNext time remember to put a space after commas and full stops.
WAY TO GO GRACIE!!!!
Interesting story about lights, it's just you need to fix your punctuation.
ReplyDeleteYour story is good because it has a lot of information about lights. Next time you should read through it again because you have some spelling and punctuation mistakes.
ReplyDeleteNice Gracie I like how your story is educational but make sure you punctuate properly
ReplyDeleteSam